There are some sirious problems in world's oceans. Because over fishing, ir estimate fishes in a large amount. For example, Tuna, or some other fishes 90% of that fishes decreases because of over fishing. and second one is a pollution. because of land pollution, silt and oils increased in the oceans and it kills ocean organisms. the third one is cilmate changes it killes coral reafs to oysters and because of loss of coral reafs, it contribute fish decline. and also mammals can died mammals who basedon fish forexample,polar bear who lives in antartica
I can hardly understand what you are saying. Your delivery is EXTREMELY monotone and there are very few breaks between sentences, making it difficult to understand anything. Take your time and pause between sentences. Also work on stressing words that are important when you speak. Additionally, you are having some serious issues grammatically as well.I've made some grammar corrections below:
There are some serious problems in the world's oceans. The first reason for this is because of over fishing. estimate fishes in a large amount. (Can't understand this) For example, Tuna, or some other fishes have shown a 90% decrease in population because of over fishing. The second problem is pollution. Because of land pollution, silt and oils have increased in the oceans and it kills ocean organisms. The third problem is cilmate change, which killes coral reafs and oysters and because of the loss of coral reafs, it contributes to fish declining. Because of this mammals die as well. mammals who base their diet on fish often suffer. For example, the polar bear who lives in antartica.
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There are some sirious problems in world's oceans. Because over fishing, ir estimate fishes in a large amount. For example, Tuna, or some other fishes 90% of that fishes decreases because of over fishing. and second one is a pollution. because of land pollution, silt and oils increased in the oceans and it kills ocean organisms. the third one is cilmate changes it killes coral reafs to oysters and because of loss of coral reafs, it contribute fish decline. and also mammals can died mammals who basedon fish forexample,polar bear who lives in antartica
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Sung-Ho,
I can hardly understand what you are saying. Your delivery is EXTREMELY monotone and there are very few breaks between sentences, making it difficult to understand anything. Take your time and pause between sentences. Also work on stressing words that are important when you speak. Additionally, you are having some serious issues grammatically as well.I've made some grammar corrections below:
There are some serious problems in the world's oceans. The first reason for this is because of over fishing. estimate fishes in a large amount. (Can't understand this) For example, Tuna, or some other fishes have shown a 90% decrease in population because of over fishing.
The second problem is pollution. Because of land pollution, silt and oils have increased in the oceans and it kills ocean organisms.
The third problem is cilmate change, which killes coral reafs and oysters and because of the loss of coral reafs, it contributes to fish declining. Because of this mammals die as well. mammals who base their diet on fish often suffer. For example, the polar bear who lives in antartica.
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